Assignment 2 – Draft 1

Here’s an uncompleted draft (I’ll add in the colours and more details after that!) for assignment 2, where we are tasked to express our personal concerns about one current affair/issue in Singapore. My comic takes on a light-hearted approach to explain the reasons why Singaporeans find it difficult to secure jobs.

A2_Critique_Yap Yoke Ling

Comments:
– The 2nd “the next day” can be shifted to the previous row to create more suspense
– All the frames are the same, should have more variety in design
– Make the frame with a lot of “NO! NO! NO! NO!” more striking and impactful
– For the “victory” frame, the subject was supposed to be wearing a cloth over his head (*determined*), and that has to be represented more obviously.

I initially intended to draw in the face of the subject but my classmates said that having a faceless character is fine, so I’ll leave it as it is!

For the frames whereby the subject is searching for a job and complaining at the same time, I’m planning to illustrate the increasing angst of the subject by varying the colour of the background from a cool tone (blue) to a warm tone (red).

Class Exercise 5

Examine the techniques used to enhance the time & space in the comics below:

Luke Pearson Some People http://lukepearson.com/2009/09/some-people.html

1) Write your group discussion

2) For individual: Which technique used in Some People is compelling, and why?

 

Here are some of the points we discussed in class:

– Colour gradient transits from young to old or vice versa (frameless, timeless) – the happier the frame the more yellow it is

– If there was a black outline framing the frames, it wouldn’t be a smooth transition.

– Background colour changes from light to dark (mother bringing her kid)

– Time freeze – girl grows in size and appearance within the long panel – lines between each girl; subtle way of putting the effect in

– Kept some features the same (girl with glasses)

– The first 3 frames is actually in the same setting if the dividers are removed; the gutters make it clear that he is moving along the streets

– The woman walking with her child – seems like it is a long walk due to the long vertical panels

 

Personally, I am intrigued by the repetition of frames (the 4th to 6th frame at the start is presented again at the end of the comic). It is ironic how the subject who asked “What is the matter with some people?” has in fact become the “people” he was referring to!

Assignment 1 – Final

Here’s my final draft after receiving feedback from Jing and other course mates on the IVLE forum!

A1_Yap Yoke Ling

Class Exercise 4

During lecture today, we learnt about the 7 categories of image/text relationships:
1. Word Specific
2. Picture Specific
3. Duo-Specific
4. Additive
5. Parallel
6. Montage
7. Interdependent

As for the quiz, we were asked to list and describe the 4 types of text used in comics, which are
1. Text balloons
2. Narration or commentary
3. Pictorial
4. Sound effect
In-class exercise 4a involved adding 4 different types of text into the same panel.

129_text_image

The text I came up with were:

1. Redundant
It’s so squeeze in here…

2. Contrasting
She’s one slim lady.

3. Complementary
At this rate she is going to flatten me…

4. Unrelated
What shall I have for lunch later?

 

For class exercise 4b, we were tasked to add text into the following comic:

CE_04b

Here’s what our group did!

CharmainePaulRyanYokeLing

A couple of brainstorming led us to the theme of broken-heartedness, whereby a lady named Phoebe spends her Valentines Day alone after breaking up with her boyfriend.

Assignment 1 – Draft 1 and 2

For Assignment 1, we were tasked to tell a story in 5 frames. I came up with 2 stories for the critique because I was unsatisfied with the first one.

Story 1

A1_Critique_Yap Yoke Ling

 

Comments:

1. The wind effect is confusing in the 2nd frame
2. Do not understand what the “ghost” effect in the 3rd frame is trying to portray
3. The transition between frames 4 and 5 is too big

Suggestions:
1. Use horizontal instead of vertical sequence
2. Create another frame between frames 4 and 5 which shows the female marshmallow jumping down

Story 2

A1_Critique_Yap Yoke Ling (new draft)

Suggestions:
1. Make the first 4 frames seems to portray the subject as if she is studying, but in the last frame, create a twist whereby she is actually reading something else in front of the notes.

2. Change the title – procrastination does not tally with the comic; frames 2-4 seems to show that she is hard at work although its meant to be procrastinating.

3. If I want to keep the title “Procrastination”, the subject should do other actions (e.g. use her phone, sleep) to portray the “procrastination”