Assignment 4

My mac had to die on me at such a random timing…  According to the service centre, the hard disk has to be replaced and all data will be lost. I’m relieved that all my school stuff are saved in Dropbox, including this assignment, if not… Oh well I should just save everything into Dropbox next time.

Anyway, I had to do the rest of the assignment using the computers in school. Unfortunately they didn’t have the font I used in my comic (and I can’t download them because the admin password is required), so I couldn’t really do much in terms of changing the visuals. I really wish I could have done the hover effect for the choices “Run away?” + “Apologise” and “Forget it!” + “I’ve had enough!” though (make the images change colour upon mouse hover).


Task:
Develop a multi-linear visual story in a form of web-based sequential art piece based on your Assignment 3.

Critique:
1. In order to fold back the 2nd choice, 2nd option to the common ending (as seen in the image below), I put arrows to link the words “Hey Hey Hey Hey…” to have readers scroll back up. However, my classmates said that it looked weird.

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Okay it does look quite weird.

 

2. Don’t know where to scroll towards due to the large panels

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I originally put thought bubbles to indicate the 2 choices, but I thought it would be clearer and neater to have them in separate pages.

 

3. Somewhat confusing story line
So is the girl having a dream or not? Does the boy exist in real life? Do they suffer from some kind of memory problems? Are they mentally sound?

I have decided to leverage on this confusion since the title “Remembering/Forgetting” has a bit of ambiguity to it anyway.


Below are the screenshots of my final submission. It’s the entire web comic zoomed-out with all the panels to give you an overview:

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The first page of the web comic leads to the first set of choices for the viewer

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Choice 1, option 1: Run away

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Choice 1, option 2: Apologise

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Both options (“Run away?” or “Apologise?”) fold back to this page, where viewers are met with another choice.

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Choice 2, option 2: “I’ve had enough!”

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Choice 2, option 2: Forget it

Both options (“Forget it!” or “I’ve had enough!”) fold back to the same ending.


The comic was originally in a single page, but I separated them into several pages to ensure that the viewer will not face the problem of not knowing where to scroll to. Also, having several pages allows me to create suspense at the end of each page.

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The viewer has to click on either “Run away?” or “Apologise?” to proceed.

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The “Next” button turns from white to yellow upon mouse-hover

 


My story:
There are 2 characters in my story, a boy and a girl.

Part 1
The comic starts with the boy reminiscing about his past, remembering a time where he accidentally injured someone with his soccer ball. However, he has forgotten what he did at that time (viewers are to choose between “Run away?” or “Apologise?”). He also fails to remember who he injured because by the time he reached the place where the accident was, the victim (the girl) has disappeared.

Part 2
All the above scenes becomes a scene in the girl’s dream. The girl has also forgotten what happened after she was injured by the ball because she suffered from a concussion. Whether this dream is in fact a reality is up to the viewer’s interpretation. The ambiguity somehow relates to the assignment’s title “Remembering/Forgetting” doesn’t it =p

The comic progresses with the girl getting hit by a soccer ball yet again (how unlucky).  Viewers can help her choose between the options “Forget it?” or “I’ve had enough!”. Whatever option is chosen, the girl will eventually meet the boy.

The story concludes with the girl saying:

“Wait… This can’t be true. Aren’t you the man in my dreams?” *Deva ju* =p

 

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